Morning Star Rising

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Another good progress day. I had to do some character damage-control yesterday, since my protag was starting to feel rather bitter towards another and it was likely to have some effects on how she reacts to his death in the next scene. So they had to mend their differences first, to maximize the trauma and make what happens a bigger motivator. I also think it does a good job of building an actual relationship between the two characters whereas before I think it relied too much on readers bringing an ideal about parent/children relationship to the story themselves to understand why the protag is so affected. Ha! I love being cryptic! (though those who have read it will probably understand what I'm saying). I'm not sure how much work I'll get done today since Jeff's off work and we're planning a lunch date. I'm going to make a go at it for a few hours in the morning.

Anyway, on to the excerpt: